Crown Prince Kiaz Windsarm

[Okita]

Project 100 Swords 006 Crown Prince Kiaz Windsarm

For full descriptions ( 詳細な記述のため) >>> http://luches.deviantart.com/art/Crown-Prince-Kiaz-Windsarm-97184666

:D Warning the description are long~~~~ :xD:

[Okita]

is it me, or is there a auto image size scaling active in the forum?

[eterna2]

fantastic!!!
how u do the splatters one?

[Okita]

e2: i used a number of texture brushes for them :)

[lin]

Wa, very detailed n real, and yep, the splatters are nice. Also love the colours n lighting, and the metal parts look really metallic. ^^

Hmmm, I'm thinking, if the slant of the bridge on the right hand side of the pic follows the decreasing slant of the riders(sorry I dunno how to put it in the proper terms XP ), it might look more harmonious? But that's jus a nitpick only la. ^^

The sword is beautiful too. The sheath of the main sword is not seen in this pic, right? He's got two other swords n a dagger at his waist?

The story is interesting. Sounds like it's going to be a long one. You onli writing it ah? Or going to draw it out too? :D

[Okita]

lin: its okay to nitpick, the bridge is leveled with the riber but not with the riders.

Yup he got 2 more long swords and 2 more daggers, 1 pair on each side.

The sheaths for the long swords are not normally carried into battle, it will hinder the horse from moving properly during a critical charge, so those sheaths were usually carried by swordbearers .

The story is in the work for a long long time, thats why it became so long even after i try to trim it down, if you remember I had a Forest of the Druids piece(on my dA too) the story is linked with this. Yup I have plans to draw it out, but will be seriously considering whether it will be a comic form or in a graphic novel form.

[Mrv]

Awesome job on the pic, and a great backstory to go with it! :) I understand that there is a river and bridge mentioned in the description. but maybe you can try it without the bridge? It seems a bit too distrcating, especially the big black space under the bridge.

I'm guessing he is dual weilding?(Correct me if I'm wrong) You might want to try without the left-handed sword, it a clashes somewhat with the horns on the horse's armor. Removing the sword also gives the main character a better shillouette.

As for the banner just behind Kaiz, great job on the details. But it seems to be fighting for attention with him. I think it might be better if you could push it back, maybe until you can just can still see a clear shillouette, but not that much detail of the banner.

I'm not so sure what format would be best, but I guess the best way is to see how effective the storytelling is. Story is always king in comics/graphic novels. At the same time, its not good to spoil your audience with elaborate pieces for every frame/page, give anticipation or surprises to maximise each page. After all, you can only do so much on paper.

Very paiseh for all the nit-picking. XD Its not easy doing such pieces, especially crowds with dynamic lighting, so my hats off to you. Again, awesome job on the painting! Cheers!

[Okita]

mrv: you're welcome to nitpick, points taken :D

[evac]

Wah good man
its really nicely done
The lead horse does not seem charging just standing there while the armies rush up to get slaughted by Kiaz. Might work better if you show abit more of its front legs so we can see its charging power. I thought the lead horse front leg's armour is a spear in the foreground at first so that could be the reason too. Kiaz also may do well without the left hand sword.
Sorry its just my opinion , but geat work nevertheless

[Darkwind was Here]

Some additional comments:
-I feel that the prince's charger's head is a little bit too small.
-The horizon line for the right side (above the bridge) seems higher than the left?
-Armor piece (or barding) for the horse: the frontal armor seems pretty long! The horse would have difficulty jumping / galloping (i feel that if it would not be able to raise it forelegs high enough - it would hit the armor plating!)
-The prince's right shoulder armor (left side of pic) and the cloak seems to merge together? Maybe adding a few lines there might help :)
-His sword in his left hand (picture right side) confused me with the horse's spikes.
- Perspective; the 2nd and 3rd mounted knights seems to be roughly the same height even though the distance from the viewer is different? Think the 3rd guy should be appear to be "smaller". Ditto for last guy if adjustments are made.

Just my thoughts, sorry for the rambling~ orz
Overall a really great piece :) Will be eagerly awaiting your next~

[Darkwind was Here]

wow i posted and the bbs chopped off the first part of my post... maybe i typed too much words orz

Summary of my missing first part:
-Fantastic work on the blood splatters!
-Nice touch on the (red!) river water kicked up by the charging cavalry! It conveys motion & intensity to me :D
-Good work on the detailed weaponry and armor!
-I really love the way you did the backdrop too (the white mist) simple yet effective.

sans minus the gushing and starry eyed looks :p